Blog # 4--Revision Letter

Dear Prof. EMccormick,

I wrote my research paper on "Peaches, Pesticides,Politics". I wrote on how peaches were they are picked and hwow they are produced. I also wrote on which chemicals are used in their production and how they are harmful to humans as well as the workers.

Changes I have to do in my research paper are as follows:

1. I have to organize my ideas and my research
2. Place the ideas in write order
3. I had many grammatical errors like switching back and forth to singular and plural forms.
4.my subject- verb agreement was not right, so i have to fix that.
5. make my conclusion better than i did first time.
6. write more about how politics is involved.
6. my aim is to get a good grade this time.

peaches

Peaches prevent constipation, combats cancer, helps stop strokes, aids digestion, helps hemorrhoids, boosts your immune system, peaches are diuretic, depurative and detoxifying. Peaches are wonderful to eat on a weight - loss program.
Peaches are also high in vitamin A and C.

thesis statement: Peach is the worst non-organic fruit, and a bite of non-organic peach also contains methyl parathion which disrupts the nervous system.

Here are some links :
1] http://www.organicspringtime.com/organic-fruits/organic-fruits-and-vegetables-top-ten-list-45/

2] http://www.wholesomebabyfood.com/nectarines-peachesbabyfoodrecipes.htm

3] http://ezinearticles.com/?Benefits-of-Organic-Peaches&id=520566

4] http://www.healthguidance.org/entry/2728/1/Healthy-Living-With-Peaches.html